After great feedback from some very creative people, I have made a few changes. It has a quicker introduction, a defined B section, better recording, and an overall shorter version. I think I am going to leave it alone at this point for awhile and concentrate upon some other creations that I am working on. Looks like about a six to eight week time frame to get one of this songs right. Finally I do like aspects of both versions so I will keep them posted, but overall I think the second version is better and more defined. Thanks for all the feedback. Keep it coming. It is nice to know that I am not dead yet.